This week's blog post due by Friday, February 6th at midnight. | A common rhetorical mode or format of writing is compare and contrast, one that you might be incredibly familiar with if you think back through your high school writing career. It’s important to recognize this mode in a text and how to analyze a rhetorical text in its organization. Here’s your task for this week:
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Sara Moeller
2/3/2015 12:37:32 pm
http://i.dailymail.co.uk/i/pix/2014/11/08/1415458996758_wps_3_4MUST_BYLINE_EROTEME_CO_U.jpg
Dominique Harry
2/5/2015 08:42:53 am
I really like the differences in your pictures, and think you make a good point. One thing I would consider is adding more to your thesis, I don't really get an idea of where your essay is heading. Maybe adding more about the actual points you plan to make throughout your essay.
Danielle Kelly
2/5/2015 10:48:15 am
At first I did not really understand your pictures. I thought it was going to be something about how odd Miley Cyrus has become and her love for pets. But after your explanation of your key points and where you are aiming your compare and contrast essay towards, I understand. I love your pictures though. Your topic is great, as well. A dog is a man's best friend, that is a phenomenal topic. However, I would recommend incorporating some of your key points in your thesis. For example: Unconditional love is only felt in the bond between a canine and his owner, no matter the difference in gender, background, or circumstance.
Lindsey Deutsch
2/5/2015 12:41:41 pm
I really like these pictures! The points are all really good, but personally I would focus on three points and include them into the thesis so each of the three would be stronger and the thesis could develop a better argument on its own.
nabila pranto
2/6/2015 01:30:38 pm
The emotional appeals are so good, because it would tug at the heart strings because we all imagine having that one dog best friend, who's there by your side no matter what.
Dominique Harry
2/5/2015 08:38:13 am
http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/0/04/TeenTitansTogether.png
Danielle Kelly
2/5/2015 10:40:58 am
I love your topic; I definitely agree - television shows are constanly changing to appeal to popular culture and please older people at the same time. There are so many ways you could take this topic. You could gear it towards pleasing parents like you did, or you can focus on popular culture, like I did.
Dominique Cooper
2/5/2015 11:11:03 am
This is a very interesting topic to me. I love how you focus on the changed attention span of children today and how the changes in the cartoon appeal to the children. Additionally, your focus on the importance of clothing in the alterations made was a well thought out point. However, you could also include how these alterations in cartoons link to advances in the technology used for creating and displaying the shows.
Connor Ferraro
2/5/2015 01:37:04 pm
I think you have a really strong argument and I solid thesis to back it up. I agree with you here and I think it would be a compelling essay. I also like how in depth you went into the descriptions and contrasting of the pictures.
Kirsten Hilton
2/5/2015 03:08:51 pm
I really admire using this topic! It's recently a hot topic and I like your points. Good job constructing your thesis, but to make it stronger you could use higher diction and cut it down by precisely organizing your thoughts. For example, you could say television instead of "TV" and throw in some analysis(by indicating if it is a negative or positive change) to make take it further than just a statement. But I still think you did great with your evidence and organization!
Sara Moeller
2/6/2015 06:16:56 am
I like the pictures you chose. I think you could also talk about how the first picture is much more childish than the other. Specifically you could talk about how the drawing in the first picture are much more smooth and bubbly, but in the second picture the lines are more jagged. Then, depending on which came first, you could compare it to each generation. Nice job though!
Abby Buchanan
2/6/2015 11:23:57 am
I love that you chose to compare these, too! Good job picking up on the attention span differences. You could also note how technology plays into Teen Titans Go more than the original teen titans which helps the characters become relatable. Teen Titans Go is less serious than the original Teen Titans too.
Trezden Matthews
2/6/2015 03:51:12 pm
I agree with Sara. The pictures show a difference in times, and art movements. I believe that you could improve your argument through looking for parallels between society and societal views. Maybe there is a greater influence that has motivated the audience's preference to change.
Chris Flores
2/6/2015 03:32:45 pm
First of all, I love this topic. We could go on for hours and hours about how comic book tones and costumes reflects changing times and different audiences. I also think you could use the argument about how TV producers like to appeal to as wide an audience as possible, but focus on children for superheroes. If an adult like a superhero TV show, they're not as likely to buy toys for that TV show as a child would be. Therefore, appealing to kids is a lot more profitable.
Danielle Kelly
2/5/2015 10:36:42 am
http://www.neighborhoodarchive.com/images/misc/cameos/rugrats/0001.jpg
Dominique Cooper
2/5/2015 11:24:38 am
I completely agree with your viewpoint of the topic and that television is making extreme changes to fit with what you called "today's rapidly changing society." It is also great that you mentioned the shows being directed to a different age group than in the past. However, for the thesis statement I would include a brief statement of the main points in the essay. You could also mention in your points how not only the content, but also the overall look of the shows have changed.
Adam Kovel
2/6/2015 12:31:50 pm
I understand your point, but maybe change he wording because saying tv shows are capturing today's youth because Rugrats does not appeal to babies obviously. Instead, maybe say that as the children grow so do their characters.
Dominique Cooper
2/5/2015 11:00:26 am
http://www.adweek.com/files/imagecache/test-width/old-starbucks-logo-01-2014.jpg
Lindsey Deutsch
2/5/2015 12:39:31 pm
I really liked the points you used in the essay and they were really strong, however the thesis could be stronger if you summarized the points into it.
Ashley Hunter
2/5/2015 01:44:33 pm
I really liked your idea of the changing logos, I had never thought about this! The Starbucks logo is a great example and representative of the thesis. Great key points with the incorporation of rhetorical strategies, however the wording sounds a little weird in the thesis statement.
Lindsey Deutsch
2/5/2015 12:36:58 pm
http://oldcomputers.net/pics/appleii-system.jpg
Connor Ferraro
2/5/2015 01:35:28 pm
I agree with you and I think your essay would really stand out to me because I find it so interesting how far technology has come in such a short period of time, it has always been one of my favorite topics.
Ashley Hunter
2/5/2015 01:40:56 pm
The topic is very interesting and somewhat similar to my topic of the constantly changing world of advertisements. I would elaborate a little more in your thesis, but great ideas!
Danielle Kelly
2/6/2015 02:36:01 am
I love your comparison in this topic. However, I would recommend changing your thesis a little bit to something like this: While Apple products have continued to exceed consumer standards, the world renowned corporation persitently enhances their computers through physical appearance and technology.
Sara Moeller
2/6/2015 06:18:54 am
I agree with Dani; I think if you make your thesis a bit more clear, it would make your argument solid.
Connor Ferraro
2/5/2015 01:34:23 pm
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Toy_Story#mediaviewer/File:Toy_Story.jpg
Dominique Harry
2/5/2015 03:51:35 pm
I think the pictures you chose are really good, and exemplify the changes that have occurred in media which is similar to what I did. One thing I think you could improve on is trying to focus more on the compare and contrast. Especially in your thesis. I feel like you focus a lot on the overall concept of the movie rather than what the two images say about one another when compared & contrasted.
Adam Kovel
2/6/2015 12:35:29 pm
I really like the idea here, but you would have to discuss how they are actually making a Toy Story 4, and possibly use it as a counter-argument and can say "however, the original" blah blah blah.
Elana Lawson
2/6/2015 01:31:05 pm
I definitely see what you are trying to do here. The contrasts between the two movie ads are significant, however, I wish you had mentioned the change in tone between your ads for the organization part and the appeal to pathos.
Ashley Hunter
2/5/2015 01:37:56 pm
http://www.delish.com/cm/delish/images/So/mcdonalds-lets-eat-out-vintage-food-ad-del0512-mdn.jpg
Anabel Prince
2/5/2015 02:50:31 pm
Good points! I think also you could talk about how people's ideas and needs are also interchanging, and that advertisements reflect what companies perceive society as wanting/ needing,
Kirsten Hilton
2/5/2015 03:20:01 pm
Nice job with picking these pictures! I enjoy that they are from different eras and truly depicts the evolution of society and the company. In your thesis(which, by the way, was awesome!) I would only suggest using higher word choice than "largest number of customers". You could switch that out for maximum population of customers, or something similar. Also, in your points you mentioned this but you could maybe say the exact phrase "supply and demand" because directly indicating this process would give credibility to your evidence. And when talking about culture, you could specify family, religion, race, class status, as to what aspect of culture you're talking about (unless of course you would be touching on all those parts). Anywhooo great job!
Abby Buchanan
2/6/2015 12:18:01 pm
It's great that you mentioned the advertisements telling a story about the time period. To add to that, you could compare it to other advertisements of the time (how they look similar) and how minimalistic modern ads have become.
Alexandra Medina
2/6/2015 03:08:35 pm
I like how you included that culture ties into advertising too! Companies like McDonald's need to include diversity when advertising so that they can draw in the most customers, like you said. I think that in your essay when speaking on culture, you should talk about how from the 1960's to now, cultures of people have changed with civil acts and politics and how McDonald's has taken note of that in their ads. It would also fit with your idea of appealing to the different audiences over time.
Anabel Prince
2/5/2015 02:47:57 pm
http://adoptoursoldier.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/01/Slider-soldier-flag-child-S.png
Andrew Lubbers
2/6/2015 10:41:10 am
Your pictures skillfully appeal to emotions and your thesis does the same. I would definitely continue reading as your thesis unravels another perception of war that many Americans have never seen.
Anna Coleman
2/7/2015 02:10:03 pm
This would be such an interesting paper to read! If I were you, I would try to make your thesis a little more concise. There are a lot of details that could probably be summarized into a few powerful adjectives, and it just seems a little too wordy.
Kirsten Hilton
2/5/2015 03:00:36 pm
http://www.pophistorydig.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/12/Purple-guy-250.jpg
Elana Lawson
2/6/2015 01:27:39 pm
I'm impressed by how much information you received from those two ads. I like how you related the ads to your thesis: music is a form of expression. I agree there is an appeal to pathos and humanity, because of how you mentioned that music relates to the emotions we express. Good job.
Alexandra Medina
2/5/2015 04:20:29 pm
http://stylepantry.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/10/Gisele-vogue-1.jpg
Gabe Rivera
2/7/2015 02:35:34 pm
The thesis was a little too long for my taste. I had to read it twice before fully understanding your point. Great topic, though!
Rob Wilson
2/6/2015 08:50:02 am
http://41.media.tumblr.com/77a6bb31823a58fd85404102c76c41cc/tumblr_mhiptns9oD1r1f7i1o1_1280.jpg
Andrew Lubbers
2/6/2015 10:34:07 am
Your attention grabbing pictures immediately appealed to my emotions and drew me in, your essay should do the same. I like the separation of marines during war and peace.
Andrew Lubbers
2/6/2015 10:39:39 am
Your pictures skillfully appeal to pathos and your thesis does the same. I would definitely continue reading as your thesis unravels another perception of war that many Americans have never seen.
Andrew
2/6/2015 10:42:12 am
Whoops that last comment was supposed to be on Anabel's post.
Andrew Lubbers
2/6/2015 10:31:05 am
http://www.spartanjerseys.com/images/pages/michigan-state-football-jerseys/winged-helmet/1940-al-blozis-georgetown-winged-helmet_over.jpg
Alexandra Medina
2/6/2015 03:18:04 pm
I really like this idea for an essay! I think this topic gets overlooked often because football is such a prominent sport. To add some pathos to your argument, think about including a personal experience with an injury that was football related, knowing a friend who has one of these injuries or talking about a case study that proves your point. It will make your argument more relatable because you are giving people real life examples.
Anna Coleman
2/7/2015 02:16:52 pm
Great idea for an essay! I had no idea that many injuries that used to occur still occur today, even with new safety equipment. One suggestion might be to add in something about why the injuries continue to occur. Is there some problems that padding will never be able to prevent?
Adam Kovel
2/6/2015 12:09:00 pm
http://larrybrownsports.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/01/colin-kaepernick-biceps.jpg
Jack Pearson
2/6/2015 03:41:47 pm
Sweet idea! Throw some pathos in there though. I definitely feel that you could tie it in, saying that these players use their signature move to inspire the audience to be happy after a great play, or something along those lines.
Trezden Matthews
2/6/2015 03:46:28 pm
I think you have a good idea here; however, your argument could be improved if you look between generations to show the true advancement of touchdown dances, or look between positions. Both of your examples were young quarterbacks, maybe you should look into a seasoned running back or possible safety.
Abby Buchanan
2/6/2015 12:26:56 pm
http://www.politicalirony.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/02/desk1.jpg
Elana Lawson
2/6/2015 01:12:10 pm
Photo 1: http://imageserver.moviepilot.com/why-disney-won-t-continue-the-story-of-tangled-2f8b1249-4f89-416e-a842-eb3a309011a7.jpeg?width=900&height=884
nabila pranto
2/6/2015 01:24:23 pm
I think it's interesting how Disney's always hiding the creepier parts, I mean I know it's so children will find it more amusing but as we get older we do being to understand, "No way that's possible" or something like that.I like all your key points.
Nathaniel Bigelow
2/6/2015 02:14:55 pm
I like how you noticed that Disney likes to insert creepy parts that younger children would not normally notice. This would be a very interesting essay to read.
Nabila Pranto
2/6/2015 01:19:18 pm
http://personal.stthomas.edu/tovo4184/fashion/img/1950(14).jpg
Nathaniel Bigelow
2/6/2015 02:16:40 pm
I like your topic but I think your thesis would be stronger if you put your key points into it.
Chris Flores
2/6/2015 03:25:40 pm
I really like this idea. I think you would argue that the expectations of women in the 1950's as opposed to now is what's caused the fashion change. Back then, women were wives and mothers. Now, they're wives, mothers, teachers, entertainers, business women, etc.
Nathaniel Bigelow
2/6/2015 02:13:15 pm
http://www.flickeringmyth.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/12/spiderman-3-wallpapers-1280.jpg
Jack Pearson
2/6/2015 03:32:44 pm
Cool images! i like your analysis of the two pictures, great job!
Chris Flores
2/6/2015 03:16:25 pm
http://vignette4.wikia.nocookie.net/whysoserious/images/f/f7/Batman-Adam-West-batman-5193248-1024-768-1-.jpg/revision/latest?cb=20131030223245
Simone McQueen-Gunn
2/8/2015 03:37:53 pm
I didn't realize how dark movies had gotten until I read this. I agree that we are becoming more aware of current real world issues thanks to the ability to hear about news at the tips of our fingers. I liked your take on the fact that not only have the movies themselves gotten darker, but our judgement towards movies have, too.
Jack Pearson
2/6/2015 03:27:00 pm
First image:
Mattie Prosser
2/6/2015 04:10:01 pm
I like how you said you would start your essay with mentioning how America is becoming unhealthier. Starting the essay with a strong point establishes your logos. The audience will also have to agree with that fact and therefore continue to agree with your points.
Gabe Rivera
2/7/2015 02:30:34 pm
Your post is great! However, choose a different way to word: "Subway attempts to appeal to pathos and logos in order to sell their brand". You can not appeal to a rhetorical device.
Trezden Matthews
2/6/2015 03:40:58 pm
https://justinmccallum.files.wordpress.com/2014/01/mccallum_justin_thenewnuclearfamily-3.jpg
Simone McQueen-Gunn
2/8/2015 03:48:14 pm
I love this idea. Your take on the fact that the core meaning of family has not necessarily changed to us, but the superficial aspects of it has changed drastically is interesting to me. Family doesn't necessarily mean "husband, wife, 2.5 kids, and a dog" anymore. Our society has become so accepting of what another family's own definition of a "family" may be.
Mattie Prosser
2/6/2015 04:04:06 pm
http://homeheartharmony.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/10/American-housewife-in-the-003.jpg
Anna Coleman
2/7/2015 02:04:38 pm
https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/236x/4e/7e/5f/4e7e5fe9dae4663f94e7a11be2afa507.jpg
Gabe Rivera
2/7/2015 02:13:58 pm
http://thequickanddirtydirty.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/09/IMG_8090.jpg
Simone McQueen-Gunn
2/8/2015 03:31:21 pm
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